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there is something haunting about the way blood flows.
just think - all that crimson coursing through you,
scribing calligraphy inside your gut.

through your arms, through your heart.

it paints promises across the canvas of your innards, saying:

i promise to take time, to give you as much as you need.
i promise to stay warm even when chills tickle your spinal cord.
when blades threaten to sharpen themselves like buffers across your skin,
i will flow slowly, giving them a chance to see the light in your bones.

i promise to stay powerful.
i promise to stay abundant.
i promise to stay holy.

i will weave through your veins,
craft myself into a villanelle to savor your breath,
so that if you ever decide to drain me by your own 2 hands,
you can read my words and know that you are not worthless.
whipped this up in about 10 minutes
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful concept. something I haven't read before.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Student Writer
thanks for reading c:
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tylerpuff Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student General Artist
This is incredible!
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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otcrosara Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
AMAZING!!!!!
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
thank you!
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Irixian Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Professional Writer
I feel like the power falls off in the last two stanzas. The impact of the line before that would be an incredible way to end it, in my opinion :)

Great work, as usual.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student Writer
which exact line are you referencing?
maybe if i switched the placement of those stanzas...?

also, thank you for the feedback.
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Irixian Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Specifically, "you can read my words and know that you are not worthless."

Such a beautiful line :)
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
thanks haha, but i made a minor change and i think i'm happier with it like this.

i really appreciate the feedback.
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