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and we yearned for something deeper tangled between bed sheets
but our palms were always split open, spilling malice.
our bodies, always in dire separation
even in scalding proximity.

je dis beaucoup des mensonges.
i tell a lot of lies.

the following:

we curled ourselves alongside icicles to bury the flames.

my waist still feels like a graveyard.
even after all the times you tasted my bone marrow,
you still have the nerve to say i'm not bitter.

our mansion is burning from the inside out
and we force-feed the desire with
prolonged gestures and held-breaths.

our combined scar tissue lies in a heap on the floor of our shrine
and the skin is nearly poison when we add our cancelled convictions.

i tore myself apart until all my limbs
seeped into the dirt and sprung dandelions.
neither of our backbones found forgiveness.

we are hiding in the crevices of bedrooms
behind locked doors
underneath all the fight we never knew we had.

this is how smiles tear:

my teeth are lodged in your ribcage.
your tongue is the lump in my throat i've been trying to clear.
our lips are too busy deciding what to say
to tell us what to do next
and our bodies are empty with each other's promises.
i am extremely proud of this
but still, crits welcomed~~

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paintandpencil-art Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Are you the kind of writer who creates from inspiration and experience, or do you just write it as it comes?

Either way, you're really good. :D
learningtobefree Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

i work those 2 methods together, always.

thank you so much for the support!

paintandpencil-art Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha. I get bits and pieces of stories when something happens to me, but I have a hard time putting it together. I do poems sometimes... But I prefer *attempting* to write novels. :)
flummo May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Agh, brilliant, this, and I have to say that is one hell of a clincher.
learningtobefree May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, i spent a while on this.
i'm glad you liked it.
This is really stunning. :D I really love how each thought has somewhere to go, so each line is more than just a snapshot, but a suggestion of more to come, if that makes sense. Also, really powerful verbs! I thoroughly enjoyed this poem of yours!
learningtobefree May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha well that's definitely what i tried to do, so i'm glad it worked for you! thanks for all the love c:
You're very welcome! :D
PatriciaC123 May 13, 2013
This is very beautiful. :clap:
learningtobefree May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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