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my father is a man of many colors.
on the nights when the moon stays asleep,
he lotions his palms with pomegranate juice.

the sugared blood pools in the creases of his
skin, staining it India’s red.

sometimes, my father scrubs his hands until
they are nothing but flesh & fruit rinds.

when he was younger—all skinned knees and pocket
knives—he must've slipped on a thousand marbles.
my father’s father was a welder who rolled and spun
steel into tiny spheres.

when he died, my father’s hands became blue and
free of pocket knives. to this day, he keeps a bag
of marbles on our mantle.

from time to time, he shakes the cool metal into  
his open palms and waterfalls it back and forth.

see, this is the trouble with blue hands:
they never let go of the things that scar them.
they try so hard to be red again.

my father doesn't like whistling because
an old woman in India told him it was uncivilized.
she perched herself on the edge of the Ganges River
and kneaded dough with hands of stone.

my father's hands were so calloused and bumpy,
worn from the years he spent cradling marbles and pomegranates,
so she taught him how to smoothen his skin by soaking it in
the river and practicing henna on the rough patches.

in the creases where pomegranate juice once
gathered was now India’s orange blood.

my father was the most deliberate artist.
armed with a camel hair brush gifted to him
by a local who is now somewhere far off, he
softened himself by painting and repainting
the same flesh.

now, the old woman on the Ganges has eggshell hands.
she rests on a bed of banyan leaves and floats through
the heart of the river, teaching men how to calm their
skin with the breath of India.

for the span of one thousand moons, my father washed his hands
in the banks of the water, jingled a bag of marbles, and whistled
a tune that only red, blue, and orange could understand.
it's not a love poem

be proud of me

UPDATE 4.26.14: i'm entered in a national spoken word contest with this poem. PLEASE go click "like" on my youtube video so i can advance to further rounds of judging: 

www.youtube.com/watch?v=X9qLrZ…

www.youtube.com/watch?v=X9qLrZ…

www.youtube.com/watch?v=X9qLrZ…
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my father lived in India is a colorful, image-rich poem by learningtobefree. ( Featured by wreckling )
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Why the hell did it take me so long to come across this? It's quite fantastic, to be honest with you, and I'm not sure how I missed it...

Anyway, it's definitely a well-deserved DD :heart:
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Student Writer
thank you!
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014   General Artist
i can't believe i only saw this now! congratulations on the DD, meg darling. :love:
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PriyanshiPokharna Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Student General Artist
It's awesome! :heart:
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tjcooper666 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i dont really get it to be honest but then again i never understand what poems go on about lol
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner May 23, 2014   Writer
Beautiful imagery.
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Student Writer
thank youu
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:iconintroverted-ghost:
introverted-ghost Featured By Owner May 24, 2014   Writer
My pleasure.
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Dreamer-of-Magic Featured By Owner May 23, 2014   General Artist
Wow, this is beautiful. :heart:
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much!
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Dreamer-of-Magic Featured By Owner May 24, 2014   General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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jucyfairuz Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
its beautiful!!
truly proud!

~INDIAN! i am too :D
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Student Writer
i'm actually armenian haha, my dad just lived in india for part of his life. i'm glad you liked it though!!
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puffugu Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student General Artist
amazing! as an indian, i believe this is truly beautiful!
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much!
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:iconpuffugu:
puffugu Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Student General Artist
aah no problem!
and i saw the video of you reciting, amazing hand gestures, enunciations, and expressions!
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Student Writer
thanks so much, means the world!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Student Writer
thank youu
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your words seemed to be paint  as my mind was a palette. It was amazing to see all of these colors explode into my vision, slowly building and flowing like rivers and silk. It was truly a phenomenal experience, and the story within this remarkable free verse captured me so stunningly. I forgot I was in my room, on my computer, because my eyes were all calloused hands and marbles. I read this was cast out of the competition... which makes me wonder what else could have won. Perhaps it's just my personal preference, but the emotional connection and the substance of this story is just too grandiose an influence to not feel to the fullest. This alone would sway me, because emotion is a catalyst. However, I'm so glad to see you received a DD for all of your hard efforts. Thank you for sharing this story and the perspective from your gorgeous, gorgeous mind :heart:
Best wishes, lovely! and congratulations! You really did deserve it. :rose:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much for the kindness :heart: 
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:iconnullibicity:
Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're most welcome! :heart:
It was entirely deserved.
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Arokag Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible.
Your small poems/stories are absolutely stunning.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
thank you so much
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Arokag Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No, thank you.
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bloedzuigerbloed Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so stunning. :heart:
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
thank you!
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StormsAndSwallows Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student General Artist
the visuals are tantalizing
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
thank youuu ahhh
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StormsAndSwallows Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student General Artist
no, thank you for creating this :)
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carolgregoire Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful!
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
thanks!
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nonetheIess Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
oh! i saw this spoken aloud way earlier, glad to see it recieve a DD!!! congrats and good luck on the contest!!
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
hahaha thanks so much, but i was actually eliminated a couple weeks ago!
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nonetheIess Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
oh man im sorry to hear that, i t was great!!
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SavageSirens Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
beautiful
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
thank youu
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
It's a massive shame you didn't get through to the semifinals, but this definitely deserved a DD.
Kudos <3
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
ahh thank you so much, that means the world
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner May 19, 2014
Beautiful words, imagery and sentiment.  Congratulations on your DD! :clap:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
thank you!!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner May 19, 2014   Writer
is it okay to be in love with you because of these words you've weaved,
the voice you used to carry this tune? i haven't been more humbled reading a poem 
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
this actually made my day/week/entire life wow thank you
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner May 20, 2014   Writer
:heart: :heart: 
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 This is beautiful! I liked the YouTube version--best of luck to you in the competition!
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Student Writer
thanks so much, it means a lot!
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farand Featured By Owner May 11, 2014
Oh, and also spread the word via my dA journal: farand.deviantart.com/journal/…
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farand Featured By Owner May 11, 2014
How marvellous!
I liked your video and spread the word on facebook :ahoy:
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