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my grandmother once told me that if i gathered all
the stars in the midnight sky, i could sew them into
a giant blanket of galaxies for lovers to make wishes on.

this is what you do with your hands:
learn the same language my grandmother did all those
years prior to this moment of steam and shake.

come daybreak, we collapse into each other with the
sort of stumbling that my grandmother warned me of.
foolish hands know no boundaries, she would say.

thank God that i am boundless, finding you with probing fingers,
your shoulders a make-shift ladder i climbed to catch
just an inkling of heaven on the tip of my tongue.

if every i love you we whispered
into the gentle morning's ear
brought us closer together,

we would become each other.

folding until we are one:
nothing but a crease of constellations
on my grandmother's blanket.
so i guess you could call this a poem ???

update 3.17.14: SPOKEN WORD TRACK: soundcloud.com/recklessromance…
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014   General Artist
you must be made of magic, sweetheart, surely you must. :heart:
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puddlethecat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You could definitely call this a poem! In fact, I wish I could write as well and as beautiful as you!!
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Az-Adam Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Professional Interface Designer
This is awesome! I wish I could put something together like this =\
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student Writer
thanks!
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Mmmm, beautiful.
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student Writer
thank youu
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Pandaavintage Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Thats nice ^_^
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
thank you. 
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ApinkTardis Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is great. I wish I could write like you!
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
oh, thank you!
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ApinkTardis Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
NP!
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ricoachuhhar Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yup. Definately poetic. It's like one of the poems in my English class.
Nice job!
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
aw thanks so much!
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:iconricoachuhhar:
ricoachuhhar Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lol it reminds me of when we had to critically analyze each word. It killed me all the time. But that just means your poem is deep
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MaryItIs Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
True! 
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
hahaha thanks!!
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27GreenStrawberries Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
Beautyful!
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
thank you :)
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27GreenStrawberries Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
No probs ;)
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DigimonQQ Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Makes me feel so peaceful and warm. I hope that one day I may have someone to love romantically too.
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
it's not all that it's cut out to be. 
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DigimonQQ Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm not sure I understand what you mean fully. Maybe I'm not poetic enough?
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Writer
romantic love is a rigorous sort of love. it's not all magic and happiness. 
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:icondigimonqq:
DigimonQQ Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
Ok! I think I understand now. U_U Love is just like life, sweet, sour, and bitter at the same time.
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student Writer
precisely hahaha
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poeticliability Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. 
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
thank you
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poeticliability Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. 
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Timberheart Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
Wow. this is amazing
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
thanks so much!
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Liljoja Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"if every i love you we whispered
into the gentle morning's ear
brought us closer together,

we would become each other."

I love this part <3 Simple and pretty. Nothing more to add.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
haha thank you!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:cries: (deep breath) :clap:

I'm sorry that my response isn't that elaborate right now, but honestly, this was beautiful :faint: I'm not even kidding frankly speaking.

I love how you used a lesson or a thought your grandmother told you, and built a foundation with that thought, to describe something so vivid... so fluid... something akin to undying affection.... soul-mates if you will... and ending on something... very intimate...

I'm so sorry if this comment brings back bad memories :ashamed: I truly am... but this is a beautiful work frankly speaking. :thumbsup: its worth reading. It truly is a poem.

I wish I could write the way you do, honestly. Its worth it :) okay now I'm psyched :excited: and I'm off to read more of your works :la: do keep writing.
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
thank you very much, i appreciate this. 
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :hug: Your grandparents are proud of you hun... I say this, because I'm proud of you (for what its worth).
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thornsandpaper Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
love this the moment i read the first verse. :heart:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
ahh thank you :heart:
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nikofrost Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
I like the full circle from being loved as a child to loving as an adult.
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
haha tbh i didn't even mean to do that, but i'm glad you liked it!
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darkdragon770 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student General Artist
wow this is really nice :)
I haven't read a meaningful poem I a little while
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
thank you!
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Scr1b3 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:WOW :heart: What inspired this??
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:iconlearningtobefree:
learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Writer
i guess you could say i love someone
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QueenOfPasta Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... This is beautiful. Good job! 
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student Writer
ahhh thanks so much!
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