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i exist in the city limits because i want the wind to make me frail.
fragile like a ghost,
a sorry sin i promise to abstain but inevitably commit.
my bus fare is a kick down memory lane.
i walk instead.

he told me i spun words that dissolved on the tongue
before he even had the chance to taste them.

he called me sugar like a midday ritual,
dressed me in compliments more fit for kings than commoners.
i turned complacent; comforted by new beginnings
and frightened by sudden endings.

my mother never taught me how to avoid heartache.
she only told me that my heart was a gold mine
and i should never let fake jewelry lay over it.

once, out of spite, i showed her my palms and asked what she saw.
she told me that in this world full of practice, there was no time for games.
when i showed him, he said that i am overworked.
neither understands.

now, it is the purgatory between autumn and winter that sinks my guts.
the waiting room lacks couches and candle scents.
the smiles are either plastic or non-existent.
can someone explain this?
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: :wow: :wow:

Your writing only continues to amaze me. This piece only further reinforces the fact that you, my dear, have an extreme talent. The way that you string words together is both beautiful and inspiring, and I am definitely going to become a more avid reader of your work. 

I really like this piece! My favourite part is:

"my mother never taught me how to avoid heartache. 
she only told me that my heart was a gold mine 
and i should never let fake jewelry lay over it."

That is just beautiful. I love how you explained this so poetically! :heart:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student Writer
thank you very much! :heart:
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KalineReine Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your writing is so incredibly beautiful. It's dark, but poetic. You had me hanging on every word and that's some skill you have. <3 
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Student Writer
ahh thank you so much!
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KalineReine Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome. <3
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fluffy333 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"he told me i spun words that dissolved on the tongue 
before he even had the chance to taste them. "

This is my favorite part of the poem. The whole poem is beautiful!:heart:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Writer
aw thank youu c:
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fluffy333 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're very welcome.:)
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HedonistGnarls Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
Pretty fucking good. 
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Student Writer
thanks yo
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