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let's ask the stars to build us a castle
so we can rest our shoulders  like royalty -
put the weight of all these words
down
for a few millennia
and just breathe.

our lungs could use a few hits of truth
to open themselves up to the calming hymns of the heavens;
breaking ourselves apart shouldn't be too difficult.

(our wrists mean war - forests of insecurities & impatience)

wait a few more months
for distance to build itself a bridge between our arms,
ache like
saturn is stretching its rings across your chest,
deeming you responsible for all the black holes
and stray planets enveloped in the universe.

i went swimming in your blood stream,
couldn't breathe,
no diver came in after me.

i dreamt that i was drowning in your veins,
the chill of september's rains still haunts my bones
from time to time.

colors without names flash before my eyes
making themselves a mantra of sins under my skin.
we lifted our heads in unison and crafted a tragedy
from all these mistakes.

the riverbed & jesus christ don't know my name,
so let's sit in the thrones the stars crafted for us
and shed our good intentions for a long, long while,
all for the purpose of challenging eternity.
this is what happens when i force myself
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   General Artist
this one i honestly adore from beginning to end :heart:
beautiful job, lovely friend! :tighthug:
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
thank you very much! c:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013   General Artist
most welcome! (:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
our wrists mean war - wow
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Student Writer
glad you liked it
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013
glad you wrote it
keep it up!
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Student Writer
Fucking brilliant, this.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student Writer
wow thanks.
i randomly started editing it yesterday and i guess it generated more positivity than before.
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student Writer
:thumbsup:
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violetense Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Student
our wrists mean war.
I love that line.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Student Writer
thank you c:
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catching-cinderella Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Writer
"our wrists mean war -
battered like a forest of instincts & impatience"


this is amazing.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Writer
thank you, thank you
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catching-cinderella Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Writer
of course.
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arabesque-o Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Photographer
this is a gem.
honestly,
your way with words is lovely.
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learningtobefree Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Student Writer
ugh thank you so much
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arabesque-o Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Photographer
you're welcome, lovely<3
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