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the garden family

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my father met my mother on the train tracks
leading out of Hackensack, New Jersey.

she was clad in blue and embossed with blisters;
he was wearing a black sweater and had a stumbling tongue.

the night they exchanged promises, the moon
was hiding under a cool blanket of factory smoke.

my mother wore a black n’ beige dress,
my father was decked in the finest leather shoes.

their love was a budless stem:
to appreciate it, you had to do some gardening.

the botany of our family is complicated.
i am a shovel and my brother is soil.

my mother is a watering hose and
my father sets with the sun. come winter,

she will freeze in time and we will
barely see him through the clouds.

the occasional drought will manifest into our lineage,
but my mother will burst like a floodgate.

sometimes, it'll get so cold that the crops will be frostbitten,
but my father will break the barrier of clouds.

i will help dig my brother out of messy situations
and we will be

just a plot of land on the map of our family forest,
strengthening our roots like black n’ blue on the train tracks.
i'm not writing about broken relationships anymore!!! be proud of me!!!

(i'll be back to it in no time, don't worry)

UPDATE 3.12.14: spoken word track heyyy : soundcloud.com/recklessromance…
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Chezzy-Am's avatar
:) This deserved the feature. I mean it.

I loved this work, but when I heard you reciting it in soundcloud, I was literally clapping and going "now that's good editing and execution". This isn't me being flattering, just saying that this poem suited the theme portrayed in that soundcloud clip.

The poem itself, does have a lyrical portrayal honestly speaking. I liked how this poem flowed from the beginning to how the parents met, and then proceeded to describe how they are all knit together (using the Earth as a medium to compare the way they all held each other together was well done honestly). And frankly speaking, it was a balanced work, and the ending lead back to the beginning making it cyclical (I love cyclical :la: )

Thanks for writing this work :) Truly.