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a man with a scruffy beard and ice-blue eyes once told me:
when we love, we get angry when we are not loved the same way.

i wonder if he saw the hint of indignation,
the fragments of promises still swimming in my irises.

i want him to know that my smile still stutters across sentences,
that even though i haven't broken yet, i'm pretty damn close.

i want to ask him:

if an avalanche occurs when no one is looking,
will there still be a feeling of panic?

what happens to the leaves on apple trees?

if the piano is out of tune,
why do we bother dancing in the first place?


there is this lump in my throat that has not yet translated into a poem.
i think it's stuck there for good.

the human body cannot discard vitalities;
it is not designed to expel emotional things.

as he undressed me for the third time that night,
i tried to imagine what the moon tasted like.

my tongue kept clawing its way to the back of my mouth.
i enjoyed it too much.

now, his hands find themselves curled into fists
against concrete, pounding, a war-like drum.

my hands find themselves curled around tea cups and loose change,
offering my throat to anyone who can pull him out of it.
this is a train wreck 

UPDATE 2.16.14: spoken word track - soundcloud.com/recklessromance…
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shehrozeameen Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
when we love, we get angry when we are not loved the same way.

This line is solid gold I tell you. Solid gold :heart:

(gulp)

This was actually a stark contrast with the previous poems. I'm not so much shocked as I am... taken aback at how the poem just went a whole 180 in this work. That's the mark of a true poet, and you pulled it off really well :clap: . The best reason for why it was able to do so was because of the seventh stanza in this poem - cross the seventh stanza, the imagery did leave me speechless... I really don't have anything to say, and I'm repeating myself :forgiveme:. You've done a good job with this poem. And another worthwhile addition to my :+fav:.

Well done :clap: I'm glad I've been able to read your works. Cheers.
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learningtobefree Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for all the lovely feedback!
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shehrozeameen Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for writing, and being here on dA.

You're a blessing, never forget that.
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The-Insane-Prophet Jan 30, 2014  Professional Writer
Lovely piece. 
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learningtobefree Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart: 
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The-Insane-Prophet Jan 31, 2014  Professional Writer
Hey, it was really good.  Guess I related to it as I am an angry person.  lol
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learningtobefree Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. 
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Wyhberry Jan 28, 2014
its unfortunate that it is a trainwreck, as that second line jumped out to me and I was gravely disappointed the poem was not about such a thing.
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learningtobefree Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
actually, the poem is about getting angry when we are not loved the way we love. 
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